General Critique Thread

[KingJigglypuff]

After seeing various posts and threads about how there's a lack of proper critique of various users and their mods, I've decided to make a general thread dedicated to it.

Rules:
-Criticism =/= (does not equal) Hating. Know the difference. If you can't take criticism, then don't post. If you can't provide criticism for a posted mod, then don't post either.
-One mod minimum per user. Three mods maximum per user.
-Try to refrain from posting additional mods until your initial mods of your post have been criticized.
-The mod linked must be of your own content. Do not link other users mods, unless you were a main collaborator.
-Make sure to link to your mod you want criticized via BrawlVault link.
-You may reply to users who critiqued your mod(s).
-If you have a long post, use proper formatting and spoilers.
-Be civil about your critiques. Keep whatever bias you have against a user and/or their work out of your criticism.
-Don't take this thread as a chance to bash something or someone.
-Don't make this thread all about yourself.
-Do not take this a chance to advertise yourself.
-Don't be afraid to nitpick. Just don't make your criticism only consist of nitpicking.
-No matter how bad a posted mod may seem, don't mindlessly bash it. You can say it's bad, but do it in a respectful manner and state why you think the posted mod was bad.
-Do not mindlessly praise well known mods. No matter how good they are. Do your best to find something to critique.
-If you like a posted mod that people are calling bad, do not white knight. You can explain why you think they're wrong, but do not derail the conversation.
-You may submit your work, even if it's a work in progress.

These rules may be edited and/or updated. But that doesn't mean you shouldn't follow these rules.

Edit:
-Changed the max number of mods per user to 3, instead of 5.
-Added a rule about waiting to post again until your first posted mods have been criticized.
-Added a rule allowing WiP projects.

Examples of criticisms. You can use these as a basis for your critiques, but you don't need to use these exact questions.

PSAs:

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Recolors:

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Model Imports:

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Stages:

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To start things off, I'll start by posting one of my mods to get this thread going.

Solo Charizard (PSA): http://forums.kc-mm.com/Gallery/BrawlView.php?Number=206141

[windhunter7]

I don't really use custom PSAs, but I'll do my best to answer.

-How complete is the PSA? Dunno, but it looks complete to me.
-How are the animations (if there are custom animations)? Kind of boring for some of his specials, but his A attacks seem like good animations.
-How balanced is the PSA? It looks to me like the PSA itself is balanced, but I would say that the Final Smash is underpowered; maybe buff it a bit.
-Do the moveset and animations fit the character? To an extent. Some moves, like his Final Smash, seem out of place, and not Charizard-like enough, and more like what Mario or Bowser would do with fire.
-Are there any glitches? I didn't see any.
-How original is the idea? I'd say quite original.

As for my hack I would like criticized, Vibrant Fire Mario
I would like someone's opinion on if I should revamp it, and, whether or not I revamp it, should I make a vibrant version for the other Mario palettes, too? Please critique and tell me if you think it's too bright or not bright enough or anything like that.

[HaloFanODST]

To start things off, I'll start by posting one of my mods to get this thread going.

Solo Charizard (PSA): http://forums.kc-mm.com/Gallery/BrawlView.php?Number=206141

-How complete is the PSA? It looks complete right now. I seriously don't know if it is still unfinished, but it seems complete for me.

-How are the animations (if there are custom animations)? All of them are quite good, but some of his Special attacks are weird (Neutral B and Down B from Normal Charizard). Final Smashes are the best ones.

-How balanced is the PSA? It seems to be well balanced to be less powerful than default Charizard (from Pokemon Trainer). The Mega Charizard forms, however, are stronger to compensate this, but both are still well balanced to be a little stronger than Ganondorf. But some characters, like Bowser, can still knock Charizard even if X's super armor is present, which is good.
His moves are still powerful against the bosses.

-Do the moveset and animations fit the character? The only animations that don't fit Charizard are the Neutral B from Normal Charizard and Mega Charizard X's Final Smash (even if it looks good).
All others fit him quite good.

-Are there any glitches? Not at all, yet. But I don't think there are more glitches than the ones you said in the ReadMe. I've been using your Charizard for a quite long time.

-How original is the idea? The transformation is more original than the ones already seen in the game (Zelda/Sheik, Samus/ZSS). Because you're using ONE single slot to transform (there's just model and moset changes). There's not much moveset changing except for some animations, some special moves, graphics and, obviously, Final Smashes. But I don't think somebody cares about that, this PSA is still one of the bests.

[KingJigglypuff]

You don't need to use the exact example questions I posted, guys. But thanks for your inputs.

As for my hack I would like criticized, Vibrant Fire Mario

The hat is supposed to be white, not red. The red is obnoxiously bright, but the white is okay. It's okay to make a color lean towards the primary colors (like Smash 4), but in Brawl, your current color is too bright. It's so bright that is clashes with the other colors. You'll be fine with making the red a bit darker, as the eye tends to see red first.

[windhunter7]

You don't need to use the exact example questions I posted, guys. But thanks for your inputs.
The hat is supposed to be white, not red. The red is obnoxiously bright, but the white is okay. It's okay to make a color lean towards the primary colors (like Smash 4), but in Brawl, your current color is too bright. It's so bright that is clashes with the other colors. You'll be fine with making the red a bit darker, as the eye tends to see red first.

Thanks for the feeback! I'll fix that in version 2!(Version 1 was a request for a bright-colored hat that's red)

Also, do you think I should do other color palettes, too, when I revamp it with your suggestion?

[KingJigglypuff]

If you really want to, you can make the other Mario power up variants (Ice, Rock, Cloud, etc).

[windhunter7]

Didn't think of that. Also, I like your thread much better than the other one, KJP. Much calmer to have a thread require comments about how to improve, rather than whether or not the person has skill. You are wise indeed. I don't even know why I bothered with the other thread. But I'm glad this one's here. In fact, I'm even learning how I can improve. :)
Post Merge: March 23, 2015, 02:57:38 AM
I just wish people would listen to me when I say that I'm open to criticism; just that I'm not open to being called "A person with no skill", which doesn't help me to improve...
*Sigh*

[tsukikomi]

Didn't think of that. Also, I like your thread much better than the other one, KJP. Much calmer to have a thread require comments about how to improve, rather than whether or not the person has skill. You are wise indeed. I don't even know why I bothered with the other thread. But I'm glad this one's here. In fact, I'm even learning how I can improve. :)
Post Merge: March 23, 2015, 02:57:38 AM
I just wish people would listen to me when I say that I'm open to criticism; just that I'm not open to being called "A person with no skill", which doesn't help me to improve...
*Sigh*

You just needed to learn not to take everything to heart, tbh.

Idk if brstm packs are allowed but http://forums.kc-mm.com/Gallery/BrawlView.php?Number=204671

Someone want to me how bad this is against your ears?

[Nezha B. Rose]

OoC: Good joob with this thread KJP.
So, since I do not know PSA's and color hues much, I'll critique stages and imports I suppose. I may give it a try tho.

Im a bit late, but what has been told to you Windhunter is pretty much what my opinions are for Fire Mario, you need to know that lighter is not always better.

Someone want to me how bad this is against your ears?

I hate wubs, but these wubs brings promised results. You better mention that your work has proper credits on your upload tho, because when someone says something like credit to everyone... well, a very evil staff mey delete it.
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I would like for the following stages to get critiqued:

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These are my very first fully custom stages, with these I left my comfort zone and leveled up, please, give me your best punches.

[tsukikomi]

I hate wubs, but these wubs brings promised results. You better mention that your work has proper credits on your upload tho, because when someone says something like credit to everyone... well, a very evil staff mey delete it.
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Read the description theres a pastebin link to the complete songlist with the artist names attached to them. Well theres only one dubstep song in my brstm, the 2nd preview being the only one.

[LC-DDM]

Idk if brstm packs are allowed but http://forums.kc-mm.com/Gallery/BrawlView.php?Number=204671

Someone want to me how bad this is against your ears?

>brstm pack for project M

[censored]in' what.

Alright, whatever... let's see what you've got. Downloading at the moment.

[Kyouma]

I actually am interested to hear critiques about this to know what to improve for my 2015 Miku import
http://forums.kc-mm.com/Gallery/BrawlView.php?Number=207123

[ABloodyCanadian]

My only critique to you would be to actually rig your ArmJb Bones. It's there for a reason.

If you think about out the human arm works, There are 2 bones that connect your elbow, to your wrist, and they twist accordingly. Look at your own forearm, and see how it rotates. With your setup, you'll get wrists that end up looking like this.

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I wanna be able to rotate my ArmJb Bones along the X Axis to avoid my wrists to look like that.

I do like how your ShoulderN Bones are rigged. That's a step up from the Shinda Model you made for me.

That's all from me...

[Kyouma]

My only critique to you would be to actually rig your ArmJb Bones. It's there for a reason.

If you think about out the human arm works, There are 2 bones that connect your elbow, to your wrist, and they twist accordingly. Look at your own forearm, and see how it rotates. With your setup, you'll get wrists that end up looking like this.

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I wanna be able to rotate my ArmJb Bones along the X Axis to avoid my wrists to look like that.

I do like how your ShoulderN Bones are rigged. That's a step up from the Shinda Model you made for me.

That's all from me...

well, I expected a critique for the Miku import specifically, but yeah, you can notice Ive put more ffort on rigging those "secondary bones" with the imports I actually put efforts in (like kars and currently jonathan, which I havent released because I suffer when rigging captain falcon's shoulders)

[KingJigglypuff]

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Once I get back from the gym, I'll boot up my Wii and give these a critique.

Edit: Alright, I've tried out your stages, Scout. Here are my thoughts.

http://forums.kc-mm.com/Gallery/BrawlView.php?Number=207173

The stage overall looks good. It's well optimized. The colors look great. But it would be cool if the objects in the background rotated around, rather than just sit there along the moving background. There's also a lack of shadows on the stage. And the characters kinda clash with the stage a bit, as there's no lighting/shading.

http://forums.kc-mm.com/Gallery/BrawlView.php?Number=207550

This stage is pretty neat as well, but this stage also suffers from a lack of lighting/shading as well. But it does have shadows. And maybe you could optimize the models a bit more if you can. The wheels on the toy train should also be spinning as it moves. This may be a nitpick, but I feel everything should have a bit more detail to it.